Wednesday, September 29, 2010

Travelodge Mistery

This story is completely real and it happened to Breanne a tall, blonde haired girl a couple weekends ago. Its pretty creepy so listen up you hosers. We had arrived at the Travelodge hotel and Miranda a tall, insane minded girl and Breanne were having a jolly time watching some family guy and water sliding. When they had come back to the hotel room to have and shower and all that jazz.

Breanne had to go to the bathroom the one bathroom was being occupied so she went to the other bathroom. There are two doors to this bathroom. There’s the first door and then there’s the sinks then there’s the second door where the toilet is and the shower. Miranda was not leaving Breanne alone so Breanne locked the first door and the second door. While Breanne was going to the bathroom all of the sudden the second door knob starting shaking as if someone was trying to get in. She thought Miranda had unlocked the first door and was trying to get in the second door so Breanne wasn’t scared but when she had opened the second door to get out of the bathroom there was no body in the bathroom but Breanne and the first door was still locked. Once Breanne realized it wasn’t Miranda she was pretty scared. Breanne ran to tell Miranda what had happened once she told her they were both terrified. They decided not to tell Kayla a short retarded girl and Natasha a rather tall girl with brown hair because they would be too freaked out.

When Natasha decided to take a shower in the bathroom that the creepy moment had occurred Breanne and Miranda told her not too but she did and Miranda and Breanne told her to tell them if something creepy happened while she was in there. Once Natasha had come out she told them that nothing happend. Everyone was wondering why we were so scared but when Breanne told Dawn her short mother she did not believe them.

And there you have it, that was most likely one of the scariest moments because nothing like that has ever happened to Breanne until now.

7 comments:

  1. The story was really scary and i'm pretty sure if that happened to me i'd run out of the room. You need to work on your word placement some parts I didn't know what was going on.

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  2. I think I did not do a very good job of describing characters. I believe that I do a good job of describing the settings.

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  3. First of all, what the heck is with the last sentence in the first paragraph? It totally just ends. Work on proper periods, and commas. Good description man.

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  4. Hosers? The concluding sentence could have been a little scarier, but you described Miranda very well.

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  5. There was some sentences that I lost a little interest on. Descrition was good.

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  6. Descrition was pretty good work on commas and periods.

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  7. Some sentences were run on sentences, but good detail, and i enjoyed it.

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